
Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, where writers share 8-10 sentences from their WIP for from a current writing project, published or unpublished, then visit other participants and offer opinions, critiques, support.
Apologies for my lack of engagement with you all over the last couple of weeks, first not returning any comments, then not being here at all last week. Things have been a bit hectic. I didn’t even realise I hadn’t signed up for last week until late Sunday.
I’ve received feedback from my five beta readers on my submission for Cantina Publishing’s Silk & Steel: An Adventure Anthology of Queer Ladies. Everyone really liked it! But had really useful comments on how to make it even better! In the nine months I’ve been writing short fiction, I’ve found it really interesting how everyone picks up on slightly different things.
I haven’t actually started implementing any of their changes yet, so this excerpt it still from the first draft, and subject to change. In this scene, Tori and Helena have discovered the dragon they were hunting is up and about and has just disappeared through another tunnel in the cave system. They were hoping to find it asleep at the top of its hoard.
“Dammit,” Helena whispered. She looked down at her phone, matching up the passageway with the one on the map.
“Can we follow?”
Helena studied the map a little longer before nodding. “I think so,” she said. “Let’s go straight across and through that passage. Don’t hit anything. Don’t make any noise.”
Dragon hunting is a tricky business.
I’ll see you back here next week!

Dragon hunting isn’t just tricky. It’s dangerous, too, I’ll bet.
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Oh no! As soon as I read “Don’t make any noise.” I knew bad things were afoot!
Nice to see you!. Glad you got good feedback. Betas are so priceless… 🙂
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Oh they truly are! I’ve been fortunate to stumble into a fabulous supportive group and I would be lost without them now!
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I sense some danger ahead.
And woohoo for good feedback!
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When someone says not to make a noise, it seems inevitable that noise will be made.
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There is always trouble but what happens next?
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I’m tiptoeing right along with them. Nice tension, Emily. Welcome back. We are SO not judgmental (thank goodness!) because life happens.
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It certainly does! And thank you 🙂
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Dragon hunting with all the modern conveniences is certainly a different take on things! Enjoyed the snippet…
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Thank you! Initially I wanted it to be a steampunk type thing, but that just wasn’t working. Once I gave them phones and a car, the story started flowing!
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As soon as someone says don’t make any noise, something usually happens. They’d better be careful!
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The moment someone say ‘don’t’ do somethng… it’s the very thing that someone is going to do… let the fun begin
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I’d be nervous enough hunting a dragon on open ground, but a tunnel? That would certainly take guts.
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