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So I had a thought on Sunday night that was both an epiphany and a complete and utter bother. I realised that with a different structure, Memories and Magic could be a much better story. What if Part 2, where Clara is living in a different country and doesn’t remember that she’s the heir to the throne of her native country, is actually Part 1, and the reader starts off not knowing this either? Or what if there are no “parts” and her freaking out over her magical abilities in a land where magic is outlawed is interspersed with memories of the time before as they slowly come back to her?
I think I will still be able to use a lot of the material I already have written, but it means introducing a lot of things in a different way. At least anything I’ve written previously can provide back story to how things went down if nothing else. It also means I might have to get rid of Max’s POV entirely, since he already knows what’s going on, and that would substantially lessen the mystery. In the first draft-and-a-half, his POV was roughly half the book. So. Hmm. Anyway, that’s what I’m brainstorming this week. And by brainstorming, I mean I did a few dot-points then started writing it straight away because that’s how I do first drafts. And this is effectively a new first draft now.
It seems that every time I start getting close to “finished”, this WIP throws something at me which means going right back to the drawing board. In its first form, Operation: Sugarplum, this was a short story started in 2013. Then I abandoned it unfinished for 18 months, before finishing it and revising… then it turned into the first form of Memories and Magic, and now this! This is turning into a forever project, I see it now.
But for now, the WIPpet:
This is from the very newly written first chapter. The paragraph is seven lines long in my Scrivener document, and it’s the 16th (1+6=7). Clara works in a shop owned by an artisan who specialises in ceramics. She’s hoping to close a pretty decent sale before closing time (which is quite soon).
After a few minutes of examining the vases, the man turned to her. She could just see him over the shelves between them. He beckoned her over. She made sure she was smiling again and joined him. He was standing in front of a tall vase. The stem was painted in different shades of green, like vines creeping upward. The opening of the vase was wider and shaped like an opening flower. It was painted in different shades of pink, resembling the creepers that ran up the sides of so many buildings in Racharan, regardless of the quality of the soil or lack thereof. They were weeds, and yet Mr Ranpush wasn’t the only artist who used them for inspiration. They popped up on postcards, in photographs and in paintings all the time.
Now that I’m re-reading the first few lines of this, it feels very choppy, but that’s what first drafts are for, right?
That’s all from me now. I will head off and catch you on your own WIPpets soon enough!
Sounds like that could be a good structure for the story. The snippet makes me wonder if these plants have more significance than merely weeds.
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“WIP throws something at me which means going right back to the drawing board” Yep. Been there. Done that. Repeatedly. But works come out better as a result, don’t they?
Nice WIPpet!
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Hi Emily!
That’s great that you’ve thought of a different structure for your story that works better. Though I know that feeling of going back to the drawing board…
That is an interesting snippet! I am wondering if the man will become a significant character in the story. I am also curious about the designs on the vase and what they entail 🙂
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At the moment, he’s not significant, but I have a feeling I can’t shake that he’s going to end up being more than just an extra.
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Haha I’m totally with you on the forever project thing. *sigh* But from the sounds of things, it will be a lot stronger starting from Part 2 so the reader is able to go on the journey with Clara rather than just observe her learning what the reader already does. 🙂
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I can feel the excitement in the epiphany! Some projects are like that. =)
I have this uncomfortable feeling that man is going to try to shove Clara into the vase. I hope I’m just being paranoid, though.
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At the moment, he’s just an extra, but I have faint feeling he’s going to turn out to be a member of the magical equivalent of the Thought Police. Clara seems to have an awful lot more people after her for a much longer period in this version, and I’m only two chapters in!
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Yikes! Poor Clara, with no idea what she’s being chased for!
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Yep, all being well, it will be much more engaging this way!
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Oh, man. Your WIP sounds a lot like how mine has been. I’ve rewritten so many scenes as things changed from the original plan. I hope all the changes and new writing in it are productive for you.
Great snippet. I love the weeds-as-inspiration-everywhere. Makes me wonder what’s so special about them.
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You could always do a bit of a prologue with Max from his POV but keep it vague so the reader doesn’t know who he is watching over or what his job is. Just a thought.
Great snippet. I look forward to reading more of the new take on this story 😊
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